The Roast Issue .....................table of contents..... download it
The ARG Collective
Top Ten Jeff Williams Editorial Comments
Organized, perhaps, in the order in which you’re most likely to encounter them: first the email notification of the present location of your now battle-scarred manuscript, then a frantic first glance through all that blue, and finally an only-slightly-calmer perusal of the report attached to the front.
10) Sorry to take so unconscionably long in getting this back to you; as you’ll see, I read it with some care, and wanted to give you a full set of comments, but finally realized that would probably entail a counter-paper of similar length.
9) You write in a lively way, but I think this can still be pared a bit.
8) It’s useful, no doubt, but I think you can put it more briskly.
7) I’m sorry, but this seems banal to me.
6) Blah, blah. Too twisty.
5) You must be reading too much James.
4) I’m glazing over.
3) I think you should stop writing about rocks and write about the assholery of the profession.
2) Make it both incisive and mocking—not just an exposé, but an institutional analysis.
1) I have made a number of comments on the hard copy; I hope they are more helpful than rude.